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Recently I’ve  been thinking a lot about first lines of books and  how to really peak a reader’s interest. Yep, you guessed it, I’m thinking about hooks. The book I’m currently working on My Bloody Revenge (working title) has an okay hook, but I think it could be a bit better. I really felt stumped on how I could make it better, so I’ve been reading the first lines of my favorite authors to see how they managed to reel me in.

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“I never used to keep track of the phases of the moon.” Fool Moon, Jim Butcher

“It first happened when I was five.” Vampire Kisses, Ellen Schreiber

“On the day Claire became a member of the Glass House, somebody stole her laundry.” Glass Houses, Rachel Caine

“The day I died started out bad and got worse in a hurry.” Undead and unwed, MaryJanice Davidson

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When I read these lines, I instantly want to read more of the book (well, that’s the whole point of a hook) but I can’t seem to figure out why. What do all these lines have in common. the only thing I can see that’s the same about these lines is that they are all kind of unusual. I mean almost no one keeps track of the phases of the moon. What could happen in a five-year-old’s life that would be that memorable? Why would someone steal laundry? And I would think that dying would be bad enough for one day.

My first line on the other hand:

“I often dream about the night you die,” Robby said, in a voice just above a whisper.

It’s kind of lacking something, isn’t it? What it’s lacking, I have no clue, but it’s definitely lacking something.

Blarg! Why are hooks so hard!

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